A very good talent I work with did a contest the other day, and had a great winner, who was really surprised and happy about winning lunch for her office from a local deli.
He did a good job with her in the winner call he played on the air, but at the end, he added a whole bunch of “blah blah blah” about the specific hoops the winner had to jump through to get her prize and, along the way, he mentioned the name of a person in the office that no listener would know or care about.
This is what I sent him in his coaching session recap:
Here’s how it should have unfolded: Right after you told her she had won lunch, compliments of Jackson Street Deli and she said, “I can do that,” you said “Sweet.”
GO!! Right there! No person listening needs to hear the inner mechanics of how you get the prize.
Anytime you end with a “left brain” thought, you suck the wind out of that moment of winning. You can do the other stuff off the air.
By the way, I’d also wait to do the “next time we’ll play” plug until the NEXT break, not glomp it onto the end of the winner call.
CELEBRATE THE WIN, then GO.
This “never end with the ‘left brain'” thing applies to everything you do. When you revert to data, numbers, times, etc. at the end, you’re just a buzz kill.